Caroline your painting has a great potential to be really outstanding. I feel you are just a hair away from it.
I would reconsider only 3 areas. One is the shape and the blue color of the jar top. It looks like bended towards left-bottom. The blue in the light area needs to be much more vibrant to "read" as light. Second is a background. The color is almost there, but the value and vibrancy is not. It needs to be toned down (grayed) and darkened , especially in the top left half. The last is the horizon line . It needs to soft blend into the background with softly blended shades so that it does not disturb the viewer.
I am so excited about the potential I see in it that I am almost tempted to ask if I can have a pleasure of seeing the revised version, if you decide to go for it. Thank you!
2nd Version
very nice Caroline ,love the background.
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ReplyDeleteGreat color choices and application.
ReplyDeleteLike the softness and glow..especially in the metal mechanism of the lid, love the way its rendered..very satisfying
ReplyDeleteCaroline your painting has a great potential to be really outstanding. I feel you are just a hair away from it.
ReplyDeleteI would reconsider only 3 areas. One is the shape and the blue color of the jar top. It looks like bended towards left-bottom. The blue in the light area needs to be much more vibrant to "read" as light. Second is a background. The color is almost there, but the value and vibrancy is not. It needs to be toned down (grayed) and darkened , especially in the top left half. The last is the horizon line . It needs to soft blend into the background with softly blended shades so that it does not disturb the viewer.
I am so excited about the potential I see in it that I am almost tempted to ask if I can have a pleasure of seeing the revised version, if you decide to go for it. Thank you!
Thank-you everyone for your comments and suggestions.. I really want to grow as an artist and I really value all the help and support that I can get..
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Caroline
I like the second version you did, probably more than the 1st. Your color & tone add a sense of drama & your jar shape is spot on! Well done!
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